This week’s photo prompt is provided by Sunayana MoiPensieve. Thank you for our photo prompt!
She takes a last draw on her cigarette and throws the stub in the gutter.
A wave of commuters flows from the station, heads down, dashing past the busker and his open guitar case. Five twenty pees and a shirt button – but he’s been plucking the notes and pound coins out, stuffing them in his pockets, careful to leave a few behind.
The sky changes, an eerie twilight that warns of more rain. The first drops fall, shivering the surface of the puddles. She lights another cigarette.
… He points his camera at the busker, pretends to take a photograph while watching her from between his lashes. She smokes too much. He tries to imagine what she tastes like but he’s never kissed anyone who smokes before. He wants a photo of her to keep but she’s out of shot and he doesn’t want to move, to draw attention. A man approaches her …
‘Where have you been?’
‘Stuck at work. Come on. It’s going to throw it down.’
… He turns his lens away. Always looking …
Written for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. See the pic and tell a tale. See here to join in and to read the other stories.
I’m watching you read this comment…cos that’s not creepy!
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Haha! Nice one Martin
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I like how you incorporated the two people in the background; I hadn’t even noticed them. I’m trying to decide if the photographer is a creepy serial killer or just a bloke looking for love. But you know me, ever the optimist: I’m going with bloke looking for love. I can relate — when you’re single, you’re always wondering about that one random encounter that might change everything. Maybe that smile could lead to something else, maybe you’ll strike up a conversation, maybe the conversation will keep going… and then no.
Or, you know, once you start talking, he turns out to seem less like a meet-cute and more like a creepy serial killer.
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Haha! There must be fewer serial killers around than our imaginations furnish the world with or many more people would be found under patios!
I like your spin and I did think that way myself. Creepy and needy he may be, but not necessarily a psycho. Positively a happy ending for me 🙂
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There are *definitely* fewer serial killers around than you would think from reading mystery and thriller novels! Although I notice an awful lot of creepy murders taking place in the flash fiction challenges too. Makes me wonder about my fellow writers… 😉
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Ha! Always easier to grab readers’ attention if something awful happens. Harder when your story is a ‘quiet’ one. Either that or a lot of psychopaths write flash fiction …. 🙂
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I’m trying to give my fellow Friday Fictioneers the benefit of the doubt on that last one… 😉
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Haha! At least most of us are a long way from where you live 🙂
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Good point! Well, those that I *know* about, at least…
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🙂
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Like Joy, I liked the way you included several elements from the picture, and made the background of the photo the foreground of the story.
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Thanks so much Penny. I knew many people would focus on the musician and to be honest, I couldn’t think of a way to take him that wouldn’t be written by others. Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to comment
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