#tuesdayuseitinasentence: Close your eyes darlin’ boy

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A waft of cigarette smoke tells me Dan’s here. He smokes Park Drive – no filters – old man’s fags, though no one would tell him.

‘Where you been?’ asks Pete. He’s been shuffling on the spot for the last half hour, kicking up the dirt where the grass used to grow when people still cared about making this place nice. Years ago.

Dan lights a fresh Park Drive. ‘Mind your own,’ he says, crushing out the old fag with a twist of his boot. ‘Ready for this?’ He looks from Pete to Si to me and we just nod, though I want to be home watching the match with my dad.

We show what we’ve brought – a cricket bat: a length of pipe: a table leg.

Dan smiles, pushing back his coat.



‘God, Dan.’

Hidden in the folds of wool are short metal poles attached to a wooden stock. Bile rises, burning my throat. ‘Dan …’ I can’t say any more, and I need to pee so bad it hurts.

‘Let’s go,’ he says.


And there’s blood all over me, though I’m not sure whose and it’s sticky and I think of my bed and my mum and she’s laying a cool hand on my head, saying ‘Hush. Close your eyes darlin’ boy’.

And I do and I sleep.


Written in response to My Loving Wife’s #tuesdayuseitinasentence prompt. Hear the word, use it in a sentence – or many. Today’s word is WAFT. For the rules, go here.

9 thoughts on “#tuesdayuseitinasentence: Close your eyes darlin’ boy

  1. The places we go to in my minds, eh? The writing group tells me my weekly exercises are often a bit twisted, but — and this is a compliment, Lynn — you go into places I pretend I’ve never noticed existed …

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    1. Haha! I take that as a great compliment. I have no idea what led me from ‘waft’ to four young lads holding up a post office / bank – as you say, clearly twisted 🙂 Glad you’re twisted too, though! How’s the creative writing course going? You still enjoying it?

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    1. Ah, thanks so much, Lori. Had two stabs at this prompt and didn’t like the first one, but for some reason when I thought of a waft of cigarette smoke the story just unfolded on the screen. The narrator’s not bad, just easy led – as can be said for many of us, I think. Thanks for reading 🙂

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