PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot
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‘Notes on a stave.’
I was by the window, staring out at the mist that slunk through the valley, hugging the rooftops. ‘What?’
Dad stood beside me, stick tapping the floor. ‘The telegraph lines,’ he said. ‘Like a stave of music – the starlings are the notes.’
My heart felt like it would break open, a shell smashed by a rock. I tried to laugh. ‘Trust you to notice.’
‘If only I had my cello,’ he murmured. ‘We could hear how it sounds.’
I looked down at his hands turned to claws by arthritis and said nothing.
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Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ Friday Fictioneers. See the photo, write a 100 word story in response. Full Ts and Cs here.
I’m really intrigued by how many of us have seen the birds as a code, or a message. This rendering was beautiful
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Thank you Neil. Yes, we’ve all read a lot into that ragged line of wild birds, haven’t we. Probably down to the human mind just loving a pattern – we love to see sense where there isn’t necessarily any 🙂
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That was a heartbreaking story – beautifully narrated and described!
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Ah, thank you so much. Don’t kow why my mind drifted that way, but always interested in relationships between young and old, the tragedy of a young mind trapped in an ageing body. Thanks for reading
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You’re welcome, and it is a tragedy. Oscar Wilde’s Lord Henry Wotten said in “The Picture of Dorian Gray, “The tragedy of old age is not that one is old, but that one is young.” I’ve thought of that ever since I read it when I was ten or so years old, and read the book for the first time.
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Lovely quote.
It is a cruel trick that nature plays – making us young and fit and giving us a nature that takes it for granted, then removing that vigour and leaving us with a mind ever wistful for the loss of it.
Just heading down my wistful path now 🙂
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Alas, too true for so many of us! However, I don’t think you’re at that stage of age, not yet! 🙂
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Haha! Maybe not quite yet. Though the other day my son told me my wrinkly knuckles looked like ‘Granny’s knees’ which made me laugh 🙂
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Ah, the insolence of youth!
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I know – little tike. Was funny though, and very apt 🙂
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🙂
My daughter, 11, likes to pull at the wrinkly flesh of my elbow (I hate it, but have to laugh, because I did the same to my mother when I was young).
The other day, she traced the lumpy outline of the veins on the back of my hand.
I guess we are fascinating in a sort of morbid way to our young.
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My son’s 12 in a month, so maybe it’s something to do with their age 🙂 I remember thinking when I was a self important teen, how lovely my smooth, delicate hands were compared to my mum’s – red and wrinkled from work. Now, of course, I have her hands. Such is life
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Yes, indeed. And yet, our hands are the maps of our days, and I am learning to love mine in their ageing state. It’s hard, though.
Yes, when we are young, we feel flawless, even as we bemoan our flaws.
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The arrogance of youth. I’m leaving that behind – quickly 🙂
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I saw notes too, at first, but I don’t know enough about music to do anything with that. You’ve set the mood perfectly, and then close the story with accepting sadness. Beautiful.
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Thank you. Can’t usually help but turn my thoughts to melancholy – not quite sure what that says about me 🙂 Thanks for reading
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The tragedy of lost abilities.. Love how you showed the harsh reality only in those last lines.
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Thank you, Bjorn. It’s that sad tussle between how we feel inside compared to what our bodies will let us do as we age. I see it in older people I know – and I’m sure I’ll be the same when I’m a bit older! Thanks for reading 🙂
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I was a music major (as was my mom, a music teacher) and so anything musical gets my attention. I truly enjoyed this story. I think I could make it into music, but you’d need some stems on the notes and note values. Sky’s the limit. Thanks for this, Lynne. 🙂
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Ah, thank you. Yes, it was a stretch, using birds as notes – but as you say, he could have been imaginative with it, couldn’t he? What instrument did you play? And thank you for reading 🙂
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The instruments I play are the guitar (my first) then I played French Horn (I can’t anymore, it’s been so long) three years of piano, the melodica, harmonica and some percussion instruments. Oh, and I sing, too.
And you are MOST welcome. Please stop by my blog when you have the time. My story’s a funny and kind of true one this week. 🙂
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Wow! Talented man 🙂 How wonderful to be so proficient in so many instruments. Read your story – great take on the prompt. Is it true – or a big embellishment on the facts? 🙂
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Both. Also, yes, I can play those instruments, but only functionally. My musicianship is in my voice rather than my instruments.
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Still, a wonderful thing to be able to play – and the human voice is the most wonderful instrument, I think. Nothing prickles the hairs on the back of my neck like hearing live singing. A beautiful and astonishing thing 🙂
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Well, I’m sure my mom (who taught voice) will like hearing that. She can still sing at her age.
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Good for her. I love singing – can’t really sing, but love singing along to the radio.
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That’s where it begins, though. Like writing … you just sit down and start.
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Not sure anyone wants to hear me singing. But hey, as long as I love doing it, the kitchen doesn’t seem to mind 🙂
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I mean, LYNN.
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Ha! No worrries 🙂
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You write brilliant opening lines, Lynn. 🙂 And your creative eyes see thing beautifully. A sad but wonderfully written tale. 🙂
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Thank you! Yes, a bit of a sad one. But I like to think he still gets a lot of joy from listening to music – even if he can’t play anymore 🙂
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That is so true, Lynn. I believe his soul will heal eventually with music. 🙂
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It’s a wonderful thing, music. It can lift your spirits when you’re down, or allow you to wallow if you need catharsis. It can rekindle memories like little else. A great gift.
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Geez. Your words remind me of one of my favorite reads. The Magic String of Frankie Presto by Mitch Albom. 🙂 Music is indeed a gift. 🙂
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This is both beautiful and sad… Smoothly done!
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Thank you so much! And thanks for reading 🙂
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My pleasure. 🙂
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Life does a toll! Doesn’t it?
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Oh, it does indeed 🙂
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Well done. How sad to no longer have the music.
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I think he still listens – and maybe imagines himself playing, too. Thanks for reading 🙂
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OH! Beautiful and heart-wrenching. On that note (see what I did there?), I’m going to go cry myself to sleep…
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Ah, don’t be too sad for him. He has his adoring daughter by his side – and, I think, a huge record collection to listen too. And some great memories 🙂
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That was very beautiful. So sad he can no longer play but he still has the vision and desire
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Yes, the crule tricks our bodies play on us as we age. I think he enjoys listening to music – perhaps that’s enough. Thanks for reading 🙂
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Beautiful, wistful, sad but then such is life. Nicely done.
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Thank you. Sad, but he’s had a good life to, I think 🙂
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Nice take on the prompt. Observant too.
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Thank you Sandra 🙂
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Dear Lynn,
I like the way he saw music and I was saddened that he could no longer play his cello. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, Rochelle 🙂
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Heart wrenching and poignantly written. Beautiful story. 🙂
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Thank you so much. And thank you for reading 🙂
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A lovely but sad story of how much a daughter feels her father’s pain. Well done, Lynn. —- Suzanne
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Than you, Suzanne. Yes, sad to see someone you love losing a past time they’ve lived for. Thanks for reading
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