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If I wake you as I leave, will you whisper my name, reach for my hand?
Or will you turn your back, pretend you haven’t heard?
I think I know.
Written for Damon Wakes’ Flash Fiction Day. Take a look here to see what all the fuss is about.
Loving this idea!
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It’s been great fun actually. I’ve only managed five, but apparently last year some maniac wrote 90 something! Loved it. My brain’s been all sparky trying to come up with ideas 🙂
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I’ll have a go next time around. I love flash fiction!
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It was great -had my brain buzzing 🙂
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You’ve captured such a huge amount of anguish in those few words. Well done, Lynn!
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Thanks Joy! Wrote that at seven fifteen a.m, while trying to get ready for work and chivvy my son into brushing his teeth. Maybe I should write under such pressures more often 🙂
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I’m rubbish at writing fast, so color me impressed!
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Haha! Fast does not necessarily mean good, but I enjoyed the process and was pleased with a couple of them 🙂
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Three SHORT lines! So unlike you, but perfect none-the-less 🙂
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Brevity – not in my vocabulary, Though, having just used the word, clearly I’m a liar 🙂 Thanks Jane. Might have been the most satisfying story of the day, this one 🙂
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Its exciting when you do something different, and find it works.
Vocabulary is a funny thing. I thought that Scrinfultaliation wasn’t in my vocabulary, because it’s not a known word, but I’ve just had a look, and I see that it’s somehow crept in 🙂
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I love it! Does it mean anything, or did it come straight out of the Jane Basil mind factory? Got to love an obscure word 🙂
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Scrinfultaliation occurs when a deciduous tree meets a farming implement of a different religious persuasion. Generally it isn’t a pretty sight, and the VW chassis tends to fare badly, but occasionally they discuss their views in a reasonable manner and come up with an entirely new religion which has little to do with their former beliefs, and is financially beneficial to both parties. The partnerhip is known as Scrinfultaliation. Unfortunately it has never been known to happen, so the word has fallen into disfavour. When I was a child, it was common to see a mauled agricultural implement rusting away under an old oak, or even a young ash, which is why discussion between trees and agricultural machinery was made illegal back in the seventies.
I’m surprised you didn’t know that.
BTW Please don’t blame the trees – agricultural implements can be very aggressive, particularly ploughs. Now you know where the first part of the word Agriculture comes from – aggressive farm implements
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Haha! Love it. Freedom for tractors! Self determination for the English Oak!
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Your frivolous tone suggests that you doubt the truth of my words. I don’t blame you – you are a city dweller. If you had seen the condition of those poor machines (not the ploughs, they deserved it), it would have broken your heart. They died slow and agonising deaths, their anguished tears slowly turning those once proud bodies to rust.
Oh ye of little faith… 🙂 🙂
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Maybe you could turn the ploughshares into swords. I’m sure someone’s tried something similar before … 🙂
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That’s could be an idea, but ploughs are tricky little devils – they could end up pranging their owner 🙂
I think Strange and Norrell have invaded my brain 🙂
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Haha! Are you imagining everything coming to life? I did when I read it – York Minster and other things you may not have reached yet, so I won’t say. gorgeous, wildly imaginative book. 🙂
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I’m getting totally immersed in it. I don’t put it down at night until the words start blurring – even then I try and force myself to focus. It’s brilliant!
When I fall asleep on Oxfam’s floor I’ll blame you 🙂
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Haha! They won’t mind, they’ll just step over you and carry on! Glad you’re loving it as much as I did. Hoped you might after our shared admiration of Skellig. Shame Clarke hasn’t written a stack of breeze block sized tomes for us to plough through 🙂
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Ah! Skellig. Isn’t it brilliant? 🙂
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Truly. Sent my MS to David Almond’s agent on the off chance. It was a no, of course, but wouldn’t that have been nice? To share agents with such a talented man? 🙂
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Dammit.
What do you mean, “of course”? I doubt whether you’re the best judge of it, since you’ve edited it so many times it’s probably lost all meaning to you. I think one of the difficulties of children’s fiction in particular is that it has to hit the mood of the moment. It’s possible that you got in eighteen months too late – or that 2.43pm the week after next is exactly the right time for a publisher to turn to the first page of your manuscript 🙂
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I think you’re right there, Jane. I’m so familiar with it, it’s almost impossible for me to judge its strengths and weaknesses, how it could be improved. You never know, maybe my ‘2.43pm’ moment will come one day 🙂
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Haha, your 2.43pm moment – that’s so funny 😀 😀 😀
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I think that should be a nationally recognised thing – the 2.43pm moment. I like it. 🙂
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If my brain was functioning I’d write a poem about it – but it’s not, so I won’t 🙂
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Haha! 🙂
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Perfect!
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Ah, think you very much! Funny how this one came out so easily – and I wrote it over breakfast too. Not usually awake at that time of day 🙂
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