Friday Fictioneers : My New World

PHOTO PROMPT- Copyright - Jan Wayne Fields

PHOTO PROMPT- Copyright – Jan Wayne Fields


 

The sun on the choppy waves is blinding. So different from the rain-lashed harbour we first saw together. We devoured every inch of the skyline with our eyes that day, oblivious to the pitch of the boat, the lightning shredded sky.

I feel the void, the narrowing of my flesh where a decade of wearing your ring cinched a waist in my finger. I imagine its gilt glint on the dressing table and wonder if you’ve found it yet, found the absence of me.

I turn my back on Liberty and face my New World.


 


 

Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneers. See the lovely photo and write a story in 100 words or fewer.

I resisted the temptation to write an immigrant story, despite the idea appealing greatly to my sense of history and adventure. Instead of arriving, my character is leaving New York – and why not have a chunk of REM gratis.

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40 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers : My New World

  1. “I turn my back on Liberty and face my New World” – what a killer last line! I don’t want to be picky, an it doesn’t in any diminish the succulence of that line, but if she’s leaving him, isn’t she facing both liberty and a new world?

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    1. Yes, she absolutely is, though I wondered if she at one time believed him to be her liberty and he no longer is? Thank you very much for your lovely and insightful comment, Neil – great stuff 🙂

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  2. Touching story, and great take on the prompt. I liked the killer last line too, although the imagery with the space where the ring had been hit me harder. Getting over wearing a ring should be listed as a special stage in the relationship-grief process.

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    1. I’ve often noticed how wearing a ring for so long deforms your finger and wondered how long it takes for the finger to fill out once you’ve taken the ring off for good. Something symbolic in your finger ‘healing’ as your heart does. Thanks Joy

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    1. Thanks WM. Hmm, not sure where she’s going to be honest. Perhaps back to somewhere familiar to lick her wounds before starting her new life for real. 🙂

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    1. Ah, what a lovely comment! You’ve made my day C 🙂 Love your writing too – very tempted to borrow someone’s Kindle so I can download your thriller 🙂

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      1. Haha! You salesman! I was chatting about your books with a fellow Fictioneer, telling her about the Second Request – she was intrigued, so you might have another sale there. I was looking at Medville Matters the other day … 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much Gabi! Such lovely comments. This one fell together nicely and pretty quickly too – not sure why some stories do that and others you really have to work at, but then if we could quantify this writing thing we’d all be earning James Patterson’s wages! Thanks so much for reading

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