FFfAW: A thing of beauty long broken

 

This week’s photo prompt is provided by Louise with The Storyteller’s Abode. Thank you Louise!


 

Sarah hadn’t wanted to go that day. The beach was pebbly and just a short drive down the coast was her favourite beach, quiet dunes stretching to the horizon, worm-pocked sands surrendering to sparkling sea.

She and Patrick had argued about it – he liked the drama of the rocks, the potential to find crabs and barnacles – and Sarah had walked alone, feet wobbling on shifting stones.

That was when she found the watch, cradled between a razor clam shell and a pebble the colour of jade. She’d scooped it from its nest, stowing it in her pocket before Patrick saw.

Over the weeks that followed she cleaned the mechanism, picking sand and fragments of shell from between the cogs, oiling the spring.

Then one day – a tick, the hand drifting slowly round. It seemed a miracle that a thing so long broken could return to shining beauty.

Next morning over a sullen breakfast, she said, ‘Pat, we need to talk.’

 


 

Written for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. See the photograph and write a story of up to 175 words. See here to play along and to read the other stories.

Advertisements

16 thoughts on “FFfAW: A thing of beauty long broken

  1. I really enjoyed reading this, Lynn. Lovely descriptions and you’ve managed to say so much about Sarah and Patrick’s relationship in so few word’s. The ending is excellent. The analogy between the watch working again after so long and hopes for the ‘repair’ of their broken relationship works really well.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you so much – what a lovely comment 🙂 I’m glad it worked for you. The idea came slowly (with the broken watch analogy) but when it did it felt right straight away. Thanks so much 🙂

      Like

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s