This week’s photo prompt is provided by Louise with The Storyteller’s Abode. Thank you Louise!
Sarah hadn’t wanted to go that day. The beach was pebbly and just a short drive down the coast was her favourite beach, quiet dunes stretching to the horizon, worm-pocked sands surrendering to sparkling sea.
She and Patrick had argued about it – he liked the drama of the rocks, the potential to find crabs and barnacles – and Sarah had walked alone, feet wobbling on shifting stones.
That was when she found the watch, cradled between a razor clam shell and a pebble the colour of jade. She’d scooped it from its nest, stowing it in her pocket before Patrick saw.
Over the weeks that followed she cleaned the mechanism, picking sand and fragments of shell from between the cogs, oiling the spring.
Then one day – a tick, the hand drifting slowly round. It seemed a miracle that a thing so long broken could return to shining beauty.
Next morning over a sullen breakfast, she said, ‘Pat, we need to talk.’
Written for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. See the photograph and write a story of up to 175 words. See here to play along and to read the other stories.
Most engaging Lynn, enjoyed where you took me with this piece.
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Thanks so much Michael. And thanks for reading 🙂
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Loved it. In just those few sentences, it described their relationship beautifully.
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Thank you so much! It’s not been entirely happy for them, but who knows – maybe they can make things work again. Thanks for reading 🙂
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Life’s a beach, in truth. 🙂
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Haha! Isn’t that the truth? 🙂
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Ah, poignant analogy.
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Thanks Joy 🙂
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Great story Lynn! I guess it was “time” for them to talk and work out their differences.
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Haha! Yes indeed, Joy. Thanks very much for reading 🙂
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I really enjoyed reading this, Lynn. Lovely descriptions and you’ve managed to say so much about Sarah and Patrick’s relationship in so few word’s. The ending is excellent. The analogy between the watch working again after so long and hopes for the ‘repair’ of their broken relationship works really well.
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Thank you so much – what a lovely comment 🙂 I’m glad it worked for you. The idea came slowly (with the broken watch analogy) but when it did it felt right straight away. Thanks so much 🙂
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Reblogged this on joesephin.
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Lovely imagery. I hope Patrick responds ell to the ‘talk’.
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I have a feeling things will improve from now on. Thanks for reading Iain 🙂
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How did their conversation go?
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