Friday Fictioneers : A beckoning sliver of darkness

PHOTO PROMPT © CEayr

PHOTO PROMPT © CEayr


 

Susie sucked the end of her pigtail, pinafore sticking to her, face hot from running.

She’d never noticed the door before, the rusty chain fastened with two padlocks. Susie understood about padlocks, knew you needed a key to open them. But the chain was waist height, easy to get under and the door was ajar, showing a beckoning sliver of darkness.

‘Coming! Ready or not!’

Danny! He’d find her soon, tease her for not hiding, for being a baby.

As she ducked under the chain, a voice called, ‘Come in and close the door behind you.’

 


Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneers. See the photo and let it prompt to to action – in fewer than 100 words. See here to join in and to read the other, fantastic tales.

 

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61 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers : A beckoning sliver of darkness

    1. Ah, thank you, Tish. I suppose to a certain extent we all enjoying writing what we love to read – and I do love a little mystery and suspense. Usually tied up with a little magic. Thank you for taking the time to read it 🙂

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    1. Ah, thank you so much Neel! What a lovely comment to leave. In actual fatc I wasn’t as happy with this as some other FF – but I’m so glad you liked it. Thanks for reading and for your kind feedback

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  1. Come into my parlour said the spider to the fly… 😀 Great story, Lynn, I love it, it has so many possibilities. I’m fond of the idea of a magical creature that leads her into a great adventure. (And why are real fairies terrifying?)

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    1. I like the idea too -being led somewhere magical. That’s why the Narnia books appeal I suppose – who wouldn’t want a magical world in their wardrobe? And a lot of the Celtic tales about fairies show them as mischief makers, stealing children, brides, new mothers to act as nursemaids. Watch out for them – they’re no Tinkerbells 🙂

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      1. They have their reasons. If you think of Melusin or the many other magial women who’ve been stolen by mortal men, wed, had children… and these men couldn’t even keep a simple promise. So… 😉

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    1. I think you’re right on the first guess – I think something wonderful is waiting for the intrepid child. Well, probably danger too … Thanks Sandra

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    1. Haha! Always the sound of sharpening knives … Thanks C. Thought this a bit lacklustre – a little distracted by my son playing on his mobile phone! – hopefully on better form next week 🙂

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  2. No don’t go in, don’t shut the door! I know she may be going to have a great time but I’d rather err on the side of caution. I think this comes from experience of some of the tales on FF 🙂

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    1. Not in real life, but fiction …? In real life being an orphan is horrific, but in kids’ books it’s often compulsory so the kids can have some freedom and lots of fun. Fiction is a twisted mirror on life, isn’t it? Thanks for reading 🙂

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