What pegman saw : A fiery serpent crosses the Mojave


Norm sat on the porch watching the line of tail lights weave through the Mojave. The traffic coiled back and forth, miles along the road to the east and so far back to the west, it faded to dust.

The screen door banged. His wife, Jeanie, placed a cold beer down, the glass already beaded with condensation. She rested a hand on his shoulder, groaned as she lowered herself to sit.

The distant red lights grew fainter, finally vanishing over the horizon. The sun was almost set, scorching the hills scarlet and purple. Something small and scared scuffled under the creosote bushes. The untidy flap of a bat cut the sky.

‘You think it’s what you heard on the radio?’ said Jeanie.

He nodded. She sighed, slipping her hand into his.

‘Got shells for the shotgun?’

‘Yep,’ he said, reaching for his beer.


Written for What pegman saw, a prompt based on Google Street View. See here to see this week’s original image and to join in.


31 thoughts on “What pegman saw : A fiery serpent crosses the Mojave

  1. A great start to a much bigger story. Endless possibilities as to what everyone is running from, loved the portrait of the old couple, got a sense of their whole lives sat on the porch watching the world change around them.

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    1. Yes, I looked into the Integratron – lovely building but a gateway to space travel and a way to talk to aliens? I doubt it very much 🙂 Glad you liked it. Another great prompt picture. These work really well, as if the first image doesn’t appeal, you can search round and find something else that does

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  2. That serpent of red tail lights can be seen snaking its way from LA to Las Vegas on any given Friday night but I’m glad the old couple are ready for the few strays who get lost on the way. Ha ha, I’ve been in that traffic and I have imagined all manner of horrors. I hope you didn’t mind my little urban twist on your plot.
    I loved this piece,

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    1. That’s really interesting, Tracey – thanks for the insight. I’ve often been baffled by the concept of a gambling paradise in the middle of a desert – at once a fascinating and repellent place. Thanks for reading 🙂

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      1. It certainly is fascinating. Not sure I’ll ever make it out there, but it really looks like a fantasy made real … in the desert. Weirdly amazing


  3. Very interesting take on the image, to focus on what *used* to be in view a few minutes ago. Great character sketch of the couple roughing it out in the boonies. Seems like they won’t be alone for much longer though, depending on what ominous hints they got from that radio report!

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  4. I know you like the short form, Lynn, but this one really lends itself to some sort of continuation. How about three short sections of the length of this one. You can still keep the enigma going.

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    1. Ah, thanks Chris. I do love the flash – instant, satisfying, though a little throwaway too I guess. If I work out what’s happening, I might well continue this one – I did like Jeanie and Norm. I do enjoy the longer form too – I’m writing a novel at present and an ongoing serial. All have their joys:) Thanks for taking the time to read and comment https://lynnmlovewords.wordpress.com/2017/01/09/the-devil-of-moravia-the-first-innocent-falls/

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    1. Thanks so much Alicia. Whatever is making all those people flee has got to be awful. Still, Jeanie and Norm will stick together to the end. Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comment 🙂

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