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He often thought their relationship grew like an organic, living thing, a conglomeration of cells, each part tiny, unrecognisable for its individual significance, but building together to make a complete, wondrous organism.
The first spark of life. In the bustling coffee shop, the warm fug of steam and discreet jazz playing through the speakers. A lone auburn ringlet escaping from her hair clip, falling over the blue shoulder of her jacket – a meteor shooting across a sapphire sky.
Cell division. First nervous words exchanged, her smiling as he offered to buy her coffee then struggled to find change enough to pay.
Organs develop. Lungs breathless when the phone rings, displays her number. Stomach flipping, flying, sinking at the thought of her touch, at the first brush of her lips on his cheek, when she cancels a date.
Looking back, it all seems so obvious.
So why is he now surprised that this entity they created together shared the fate of all living creatures?
The fall into entropy and decay.
Written for Stephanie at Word Adventure’s #tuesdayuseitinasentence. See the word – today it’s ORGANIC – and write a post. See here to read the other tales and to join in.
Beautifully and very skilfully done!
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Ah, thank you, sweetheart 🙂
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Ouch!
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Oh, yes – ouch indeed 🙂
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Word perfect!
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Thank you so much, Tish! You’re very kind 🙂
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Oh. That hurt. But well done. Your pace was excellent and the structure was a lot of fun.
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Ah, thank you. I wasn’t quite sure if the format worked – it felt close but not quite right. I probably should have researched the science terminology much more, then it might have rung better. Thank you for reading 🙂
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Pleasure!
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🙂
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So beautiful. Breathtaking.
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Wow, that sprawls in such a tiny space. And such cool use of the format, atop each paragraph, those three with the bold/italic. Lovely phrasing and dense story-telling. First class, but feels like we’re sitting in the economy section, wedged in.
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Wasn’t quite sure if it worked entirely – felt close but not quite on the nose. Good fun, trying to sum up an entire relationship from beginning to end in less than 150 words, though 🙂 Thank you
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Things rarely “on the nose.” You wouldn’t appreciate the times they are as much otherwise…
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Very true, Bill 🙂
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What Bill said. 🙂
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Thank Joy 🙂
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What a great resd, such an inventive approach!
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Thank you so much and thanks for reading 🙂
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You may not have been happy with the finished product but I found this a beautiful encapsulation of a relationship. Nicely done. 🙂
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Thanks so much Louise. Glad it worked for you. Yes, fun to sum up a relationship in so few words:)
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Creative and lyrical, Lynn. Nice job.
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Thank you Chris. I think my science facts could have been better, but it was an interesting excercise in structure 🙂
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Extremely well written Lynn. You know your biology well! A sad ending perhaps but I guess, I’m thinking from her view. Between them there was something which didn’t fit, not the attraction needed, so she split.
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That’s true, Amanda. It’s sad when relationships end, but if it’s not working, it’s not working. Thank you for reading 🙂
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♡♡♡
That’s all.
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Thanks Chris 🙂
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Thank you so much and thanks for reading 🙂 Extremely well written Lynn.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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