PHOTO PROMPT © Kent Bonham
‘The registration number?’
A gloved hand took the slip of paper from her fingers. Glove and paper vanished inside the open car window for a moment before reappearing.
‘Take it,’ said the voice.
‘Won’t you need it?’ she stammered. ‘To remind you -‘
‘I’ll remember.’
She tried to fix in her head the timbre of the voice, pin down the gender, but there was nothing to identify the speaker, nothing distinctive.
She might have been talking into a void.
‘You’ll know when it’s done,’ said the voice.
‘How?’
‘The world will shift.’
Then the car was gone and she was alone.
Here’s my cheerful little entry to this week’s Friday Fictioneers. Run by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, this is the best writing prompt online and I’m glad to be back after a two week enforced hiatus. But now we have wifi back and I’m in a killing mood … See here to join in the fun and to read the other tales.
Wow! Very enigmatic! Lovely sinewy writing, implying more than it says.
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Thanks Penny! Yes, I was trying to hint more than say – always find the balance a tricky one, in case I say too little to be understood! Thanks so much for reading 🙂
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I do like this one, Lynn. Brilliant ending.
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Thank you Chris! I’ll leave the details to your imagination, but I don’t think happiness lies ahead for anyone involved. Thanks for reading 🙂
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Ohhhh! Very intriguing, Lynn. makes me wonder what’s next. The world will shift — politically or physically or personally. THAT’S gonna be the question. Great job!
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Thanks Kent! Yes, I’ll leave the details to yourself, but things are gonna get interesting, that’s for sure. Terry Pratchett had a curse in one of his Discworld novels ‘May you live in interesting times’ which doesn’t sound like a curse at all until you watch the news and see what’s deemed ‘interesting’. Thanks for reading
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Haha! Yes, it’s considered a curse from China. One that Rochelle put in her book was a Yiddish one translated, “May you suffer and remember.” Lightly stated, but hugely effective. 😀
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The best kind of curse! 🙂
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Yep, deliciously nefarious – like it…
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Oh, truly shady I hope! Thanks for reading Martin, glad you liked it
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Very mysterious. Loved it.
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Thank you so much 🙂
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oh, wickedly told. scary.
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Ominous! Nice touch with the mysterious “other” who can’t even be identified by gender and appears about to do something very sinister. If I were her, I’d be pretty worried about exactly how the world will shift once “it” is done!
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Yes, me too! I have a feeling she may live to regret her actions. Thanks so much, Joy 🙂
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Intriguing and beautifully rendered atmosphere, Lynn
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Thanks so much Neil 🙂
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Something very shifty going on. Delicious snippet Lynn
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Oh, yes indeed – lovely word, shifty 🙂 Thanks so much for reading Iain 🙂
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Yes, I like this, style. Maintaining this for longer will be tricky, this short burst works well, though. Which is the point of a flash fiction story. Thanks for sharing.
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Quiet right, some of these techniques are unsustainable in longer pieces – an opening chapter or prologue perhaps, nothing longer. Thanks Kelvin 🙂
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My imagination is working overtime – I have several candidates in mind. 🙂 Nicely done, Lynn.
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, I have several too 🙂
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Dear Lynn,
Quite the mysterious story this week. I could imagine this for you’ve drawn it well. I certainly want to know more. Good job.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. Good fun to tease the reader in these shorts, raise some questions that only the imagination can answer. Thanks for reading 🙂
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Not sure I like the sound of The Voice. As for the ending…..!
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No, I think I’ll steer clear too! Thanks for reading Keith 🙂
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That was quite the cheerful little tale.
Fabulously told and I want more deets! Great job.
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Thank you Dale. Yes, not a happy tale, but some of the best are not laugh a moment stories. Thanks for reading 🙂
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That is very true.
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So well-written. Leaves me wanting to know if her world did indeed shift.
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Thanks so much and thanks for taking the time to read this 🙂
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“Cloak and Dagger” at it’s best! Such an awesome mystery that the reader would want to know more. Just Great! Nan
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Thank you Nan! A lovely comment and thanks so much for reading 🙂
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Mysterious. Great story!
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Mysterious and fascinating, lots of questions to ask. I enjoyed this Lynn
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Thank you so much Michael. So glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Cheerful indeed, Lynn! 😀 Although two weeks without wifi is almost a bit more disturbing…Hope the holidays are going well for you
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Yes, two weeks detox probably sent my mind careening into the darkness … ! Hope your holidays are going well too, Helen. Thanks for reading 🙂
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Going well thanks, Lynn – hope you’re having nice holidays too 🙂
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Very mysterious. Love: the world will shift.
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Thank you Sascha! That’s very lovely of you 🙂
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That was a little scary.
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Ooh, good! Hope it was scary in a good way. Thanks for reading Dawn
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