Friday Fictioneers : The silvering of clouds

PHOTO PROMPT © Douglas M. MacIlroy

There’s a light you get at twilight, when the sun is tucked behind silvery clouds. The sky’s still blue, holding onto day, but the earth is draining of colour, already sliding into night.

It was like that twenty years ago. Day Zero we call it now, but really it was just another summer’s day, a day I have no memory of. Until the broadcast.

I remember Ma’s face as the news came buzzing and tinny over the radio. A sandcastle crumbling under waves. The radio has remained dumb since.

If you could see us all now, Ma, you’d weep.


Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneers. Come on over, be inspired here, read and comment. It’s a joy.




70 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers : The silvering of clouds

  1. You’ve constructed that story beautifully, Lynn. The images you use to illustrate apocalypse are not those of nuclear fire and plague but your mother’s face, and a crumbling sandcastle. That makes it so real it’s even more heart-breaking. It’s supremely skilful wordcraft.

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    1. Thank you Penny. Your comments are always uplifting, always incisive. So glad you liked the way I approached the story – sometimes, things are best hinted at ,aren’t they? Thank you so much for reading

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  2. Wow. You really are good at leaving me with questions, that I might attempt to answer, that might be correct, but probably wouldn’t. I’d say this is another of your openers to some spine-shivering short story.


    1. Thank you. Inspiration is a funny thing. I saw the contrast between the blue sky and the dark land, that moment you get when the sun is setting. I began to describe that and perhaps it just led to the sun setting in other ways. Not sure why I though end of the world – the brain is a funny old thing. Thank so much for reading

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  3. A quite exquisite creation, Lynn, even by your exalted standards, vividly yet subtly portraying a post-apocalyptic dystopia.
    And too close to current reality for comfort.

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