
‘The lady stayed in the shadows, mostly.’
‘Particular shadows? Particular places?’
‘I saw her in the park . On days when men came round and I had to leave the flat. The lady would be under the trees, waiting for me.’
‘When else?’
‘At school before I was excluded. In the flat too.’
‘Was that when your mum was taking drugs?’
‘Yeah. We had a cupboard in the hall. When Mum came back from her dealer, the lady would be in the cupboard.’
‘How do you know she was there? Did you see her?’
‘I heard her. She had a way of breathing.’
‘Can you describe it? This way of breathing?’
‘No.’
‘Do you still see her?’
‘Only when I’m off my meds.’
‘Like last week?’
‘Yeah.’
‘Did you really forget to take your medication, like you told the police?’
‘No.’
‘Then why -‘
‘Because I missed her.’
***
Written for What Pegman Saw, the prompt that uses Google Street View as its starting point. This week we visit Providence, Rhode Island. See here to join in.
Wow. This is a stunning story. You do a great job painting the picture with dialog. Well done!
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Thanks very much, Josh. Bit of a stretch for me, all dialogue, as I love description! Glad you thought it worked
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Aw, this shouldn’t be a sweet story, and yet it is. Nicely turned, 🙂
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Thank you Crispina. Glad you liked it
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Well done, the last line is a grabber.
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Thanks very much, Mark
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Such a haunting story. The last line took my breath away!
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PS I didn’t see you on the InLinkz, did you mean to include it? https://fresh.inlinkz.com/party/8ce6b3624e77438896011fa54ff6abbd
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Hello, Karen. Sorry for the late reply, been ‘away’ during most of lockdown, writing a first draft of my current WIP. Thank you so much for the kind words. Hope your own writing is going well
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Good dialogue, intriguing situation and killer last line.
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Thanks so much, Penny. Very kind of you to say so
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Wow, Lynn. That was so well done.
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Aw, thank you Dale x
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Wow, that is a fantastic take on mental illness and the honesty behind it. I always say the people who are really crazy are the ones that insist they are not!
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Thank you so much! Really glad you felt it worked and thanks for reading
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This is so awesome!
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Thank you so much 😀
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