‘So, how long have you been friends?’ I say.
Chloe sits across from me at the table – I’ve accidentally brushed her knee three times already and her close proximity makes me feel small and hot. She’s around five eight, hair a chestnut waterfall running into the chasm of her cleavage. Any woman’s worst nightmare … and my new bloke’s best friend.
She shifts the flow of hair from her bust to her shoulder. ‘Oh, forever. Since uni. Right, Ben?’
‘Yeah,’ says Ben. ‘We were in the same shared house.’
He flicks her a look, as if a little secret’s tucked away behind his warm brown eyes.
‘Great,’ I say, draining my pint.
I should have worn that tight skirt and heels instead of the jeans with the paint stain on the thigh. Should have ordered a gin rather than swigging Guinness. I have a cleavage somewhere, but it’s packed away under a Fair Isle jumper because how was I to know I’d be needing it tonight?
‘Yes,’ says Chloe. She sucks a lemon slice, tearing at the flesh with perfect teeth before saying, ‘Just before we started going out, wasn’t it love?’
Me and Chloe are going to get on like a house on fire.
Written for the Sunday Photo Fiction prompt. Use the picture as a springboard for your fiction. See here to join in and to read the other stories.
Nice character sketch. There’s a lot of tension in the piece. I think Ben’s probably doomed.
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Thanks very much. Maybe Ben is doomed but if so I thinnk he may have brought it on himself!
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An old flame too often turns out to be really hot (so I’m told); and we all know that a house on fire isn’t a good thing, right? Great sketch from the prompt. 🙂
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Yes, funny how we use the phrase ‘house on fire’ to mean people getting on really well. Thanks Chris – I think there will definitely be trouble ahead 🙂
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I like that. I think things may not be going to go well for Ben.
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Yes, trouble ahead. His own fault, daft lad 🙂 Thanks
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Great little story, Lynn. Ben sounds like some of the men I’ve been lucky enough to meet!
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Ben must be an attractive guy, but he’s about to be in a whole lot of trouble! Thanks for reading 🙂
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Laughing.
Superb characterisation.
Do you have Chloe’s number, please?
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Haha! Sadly, I suspect Chloe only has eyes for one man and he’s taken.
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I like that you’re using ‘bad grammar’ to paint the voice for this character, “Me and Chloe.” God, the way kids use grammar like that drives me NUTS around here. not MY kids!
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Haha! I quite enjoy writing in 1st person sometimes, because it means I can be lazy and not worry about the grammar (never my strong point!). My son gets picked up on saying ‘should of’ instead of ‘should have’ (very common among kids here) and a rising inflection at the end of a sentence when not asking a question. Makes teens sound so unsure of themselves – which, to be fair, they often are 🙂
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Great take.
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Thank you 🙂
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Sounds to me like Chloe might actually be Ben’s worst nightmare too. What real friend acts like that with her “friend” and his new girlfriend? My guess is that he’d be better off distancing himself from that hopeless hope from his past who’s still messing with his mind, and focus on someone who will treat him well. But my guess is also that Ben is an idiot and the narrator is better off without him.
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Haha! I suspect you’re right on all counts there, Joy. At least he should have told his new girl that his best friend is an ex – that’s bad with a capital B.
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Yep, that’s where the “idiot” part comes in.
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🙂
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Great write. Seems like there is some strong attraction going both ways, and not Ben’s way either. A great meet cute ?
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Ha! Maybe the girls should ditch him and get together? He seems pretty hopeless. Thanks for reading Amanda 🙂
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Very nice – though I can’t help but feel sorry for Ben. After all it was a long time ago
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True. But he should see that the old flame is causing him trouble with the new – unless he likes the idea of women tussling over him of course 🙂 Thanks for reading
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Yep there is that of course 😉
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🙂
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Poor Ben… I suspect he will lose them both in the end.
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Haha! I think you may just be right there Roger. What a daft lad. Thanks for reading 🙂
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