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The sun was low by the time Alison made it out of the city. The streets had been clogged with traffic since the alarm sounded, every lane blocked by dumped cars. In the end, she’d left the Ford and joined a river of humanity drawn to the desert. Beyond the concrete and steel, things felt calmer, voices hushed over the sound of feet stumbling through sand.
A last emerald flash of sunlight and the Long Night fell.
She thought of all those she’d loved as the frost furred her lashes and the cold grew hard. Finally, her heart slowed, stilled.
Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneers. See here to join in and to read the other tales.
The ’emerald’ sunset refers to a phenomenon called the Green Flash. See here.
I’m thinking “nuclear winter.”
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Me too!
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This is really interesting as I never thought of it that way. Though perhaps with everything that’s happening in the world, it’s no surprise that so many of you thought this way. Thanks for reading Varad
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Could well be, James. Thanks for reading 🙂
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With your usual skill you lead us into the story, even though we know it’s terminal! Well done, Lynn!
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Oh, the dread of the “emerald flash”. True fear of the nuclear winter is envisioned in this piece. So very real that I can feel the frost on my eyelashes. Wait, did I see a flash of green… ah, it’s just a tree in the wind. Shewww, that was close.
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I didn’t write it with a nuclear slant in mind, but many people have seen that in it. Scary times. Thanks for reading 🙂
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The image of all the masses, the exodus i think of a bleak future when the button has been pressed one time too much.
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Stange days indeed. Let’s hope fingers can be kept from buttons a while longer yet 🙂
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This is lovely writing as always.
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Sadness tinged with love, ending in such a finial note. Fine writing.
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Thanks so much Michael 🙂
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Splendid! “Green Flash!” Never heard of it, but enjoyed the video. Observed our sun when we were at the beach last week, as it went that wobbly/oblong shape. Nice to read you! Bill
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Thanks Bill. I’ve never witnesseed a green flash either, but then living in the city, the sun gets eaten by high rise blockes before it hits the horizon. Love the sound of a wobblu oblong sun though 🙂
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The stillness of the long night. Such beautiful writing, but then isn’t that the norm with you, Lynn. Brilliant.
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Thank you Neel, you’re very kind
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Wow, that got cold fast! Makes me wonder what even more horrible thing was happening in the city that made everyone want to leave, given how well they fared outside.
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Well, I had in mind that the sun was snuffed out somehow and that she went into the desert because it was a lovely place to be at the end and maybe it would get cold more quickly without the buildings to shield her. Without the sun the Earth would be damn cold 🙂 Thanks Joy
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Eep, that’s a chilling (ha ha, pun not intended) thought! I’ll bet there are people who could calculate exactly how long it would take for the earth to freeze if the sun suddenly disappeared, but I’m not one of them. I’ll go with “quicker than you’d like.” 🙂
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Or maybe ‘not quite quick enough’? If I’m gonna go, I’ll quickly thanks 🙂 I could Google that stat – I’m sure it’s out there – but I won’t as the sun is shining here and the sky is a lovely blue!
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Good point: once the painful part starts, let’s just get it over with. I was thinking more about time enough to find your loved ones and say goodbye.
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We’d all like to say goodbye, wouldn’t we, cram in those last words we should perhaps have said before. Hopefully, we’ll all get the chance
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I love this. Very poetic and atmospheric.
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Thanks JA. 🙂
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I liked the ‘frost furring’. Very graphic.
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Thanks so much Sandra 🙂
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Dear Lynn
You’ve skillfully created the atmosphere, the sense of panic and, ultimately, the final beats of a woman’s heart. Well written and masterfully crafted.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you so much Rochelle. 🙂
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Wow, that green flash phenomenon is lovely. I can’t imagine what it looks like in real life!
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Me neither, though it seems it’s less of a flash, more a glow
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Utterly spellbound with this one Lynn. I’d be screaming NOOOO, except you left me breathless.
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Thanks so much! There are worse ways to die I guess
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A poignant piece indeed.
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Thanks Keith 🙂
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You know… if one is to die, this is not a bad way… you made it feel like it was a gentle walk into it…
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Ah, thanks Dale. Yes, we can but hope we all aned with that gentle walk, rather than some of the other options. I’d rather like to go dozing on a beach, the sound of waves rushing in my ears.
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Yes. That would be a wonderful way to go…
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Beautiful. Peace at last.
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Excellent writing of a time we can hope never comes.
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Fingers crossed. Thank you 🙂
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Wow, you really lead me down a dark path. There was some really nice imagery in this and some how I felt her death was peaceful. Nicely done.
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Thank you. I think so too. I think she’d come to terms with it, which is all any of us can hoe for 🙂
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We often hear of lively stories but its the life in the stories that counts. Great write.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Yeah I’d like to add to the voices that said ‘Nuclear winter”. Nice one.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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I hear Hazy Shade of Winter in the background. Well done!
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Love that song! The intro is running through my head as I type. Thanks Miles 🙂
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beautiful , Lynn.
Could it be that Alison is suffering from a terminal illness and wondering how her last cold moments would be ?
Thanks for the video on ’emerald flash’
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Could be, Moon. Could just be she wants to be somewhere beautiful at the end, to feel a contact with nature outside of the concrete and steel. Thanks so much for the kind comment
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Always a pleasure.🙂🙂
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🙂
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A thought provoking story.
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Thanks Dawn 🙂
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I was leaving the city with her… nicely developed mood 🙂
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Thanks so much – I’m glad it worked for you 🙂
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😉
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I was not expecting that ending, which did make me think of a nuclear war. Very bleak.
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You weren’t the only one, though I didn’t have a nulcear war in mind when I wrote it, so I wonder if what’s going on in the world has informed people’s reading of it. Thanks so much for reading 🙂
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It could be. Also, a lot of dystopian fiction seems to have nuclear war (or zombies or both, hehe) as their source so that might just be going with the expected. The green flash made me think of a detonation of some type, I think.
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Ah, yes, I think the flas took a few people that way. And you have to love dystopia with zombies and nuclear war – way to throw everything at the human race! 🙂
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lol….go zombies!
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Ha! 🙂
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