‘Hello? I don’t know if anyone can hear this broadcast – the signal’s terrible, a stormhead’s gathering, causing interference. I know you’re out there, Stephen, that you might be monitoring this wavelength –
‘I heard something … hold on.
‘I had to look, I thought I heard … The sun’s setting. I don’t have much time.
‘Stephen – anyone – if you’re listening, this is Rodney Statham, Professor Rodney Statham of the Imperial College research team. We were recording the flora and fauna of Slaughter Bay. We arrived seven days ago, a group of five research scientists, two local guides – Burnum and Daku … They were brothers, Stephen. Their poor mother –
‘There! I’m certain this time. Something outside the hut –
‘Stephen, if you hear this, if a rescue party is coming from the mainland – you must stop them!
‘God, that awful smell! Hawthorn and corpses. One’s coming under the door! Another! They’re on me, they -‘
Written for What Pegman Saw, a prompt using Google Streetview. To join in and to read the other stories, visit here.
Very nice use of the dialogue only style. Adds a lot to the tension. 😀
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Thank you JM – kind of you to say so 🙂
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I was going to say the same thing — it’s trickier to write with only dialogue (I know) but you do it very effectively here! Not knowing what exactly is happening but only hearing his fear makes it that much more tense! The only part where it slowed down was where he paused to explain the details of the mission; I didn’t get why he would do that (except as an info dump), especially since he thinks he’s talking to someone he knows.
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Thanks Joy. Yes, very true about the info dump, though was hoping to get away with that when he says ‘Stephen – anyone -‘ as he is basically talking to the air, not knowing who – if anybody – is listening. Glad it made you a tiny bit fearful though 🙂
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A tense story, Lynn, where I was ticking off who who or what it could be as I read; natural disaster; aliens; zombies… And you leave us hanging. Which I like. I really like. And I like the way he introduces himself over the air, as any good professor would do, they rarely get straight to the point! (Sorry all professors out there!)
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Thanks so much Kelvin! Really glad you liked it
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Oh, wow! That’s a classic thriller/horror story! I hope the rescuers stay away (They won’t, of course…)
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Thanks Penny – yes, let’s hope so 🙂
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This one left me breathless. The dialogue-only style really makes this story wracked with tension!
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Thanks Karen. Glad you thought it worked 🙂
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Yeek! I guess it’s not called “Slaughter Bay” for nothing.
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Absolutely! Thanks for reading 🙂
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Zombies!
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🙂
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I can almost hear the airwaves crackling. Now I want to know what’s happening ~ and I don’t.
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Nothing good, I’m sure! Thanks Lish
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Hi Lynne Love…
I feel like that last three lines changed it completely – so interesting how three sentences twisted the entire ending like that…
and my favorite part:
“a stormhead’s gathering….”
because it pulled me in deep at that point and still amazes me how 100 words can give us so much
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Thank you so much. and that’s really nice feedback – good to know where fellow writers think I’m going right! Thanks for reading 🙂
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My pleasure and hope u have a nice week
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