Friday Fictioneers: A little piece of heaven

PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot

The door squeaked open. Kurt stepped out onto the tenement roof and propped the door open with an old metal chair he’d saved from a skip. He felt in the brick planter – no plants, just bricks – and fished out his tobacco wallet.

The cigarette paper slipped easily through his practiced fingers, flakes of tobacco tamed into a tube. The lighter flared, clicked shut.

The lead roof was still hot, petrol fumes dissipating a little as day gave way to night.

Laney’s voice reached him up the stairwell. ‘Kurt! Dinner.’

Downstairs the baby was giggling, hiccuping, giggling.

Not a bad life.


Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneers. See the picture and write along. See here to join in the fun.


51 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: A little piece of heaven

  1. He took all the trouble so that his baby doesn’t get to do passive smoking.
    That’s a considerate father.
    Wish he uses this lockdown opportunity to kick the cigarette smoking habit.
    Stay safe.


      1. It’s an excellent book. It builds upon the results of neurologists to determine what hooks a reader, and keeps them hooked. It’s not just a craft book, it goes way beyond that. But then, I’m fascinated by the human brain, and our propensity as storytellers


  2. Linda is right – it’s the details that make this such an excellent piece of work. My favourite line was “and propped the door open with an old metal chair he’d saved from a skip.” Not just any chair – it was old, it was metal, it was salvaged and it came from a skip. That tells us so much about the man. Kudos!


    1. Thank you so much Penny. I value your keen eye, that close inspection of detail. You’re right, that chair described part of his character and his life – he’s either not too well off or loves to reuse things! Thank you so much, as always


  3. I could clearly see Kurt on the roof, hand rolling his cigarette. Think you evoke that special evening time of day, love the sound of the baby giggling and hiccupping. Lovely story/


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